Contemplation-1
I’ll be doing a series of short stories and poetry like this first installment, they will all be named Contemplation so look out for the next few coming up! Please enjoy. C:
“Just keep going on walking,
Just keep going on talking,
On and on, no more no less,
Just keep going anonymous,
But I know what you are,
Your clothes, location, car,
You’re just another simple face,
Another glance in another place,
Another step in the endless sidewalk,
Another artist with a piece of chalk,
Another guitar string strummed,
Another poor child’s mind numbed,
Another dollar inside rich men’s pocket,
Another forgotten photo inside a locket,
Another piece of breathing, living dust,
Alas another fence meant to someday rust.”
–SAsammygirl
Comments? Always appreciated.
~SAsammygirl
March 5, 2010 at 8:48 AM
I am going to see 9 in blue ray today!!!! (From Netflix) Aha! :)
March 5, 2010 at 10:56 AM
Awesome! I hope you like it as much as I did. C:
March 6, 2010 at 3:14 AM
And I love it it’s my second favorite movie (Besides Avatar)
Especially I loved it in Blue ray! My mom gave the movie 5 stars!
March 7, 2010 at 5:40 AM
I’m glad you liked it so much! :D
March 4, 2010 at 3:53 PM
well nothing that is unexceptable in poetry, i meant. nothing like “I aint got no idea why you is here”
March 3, 2010 at 4:33 PM
where are the mistakes? i cant see them
March 3, 2010 at 5:11 PM
Daw thankies. But there ARE a few mistakes. :p
March 4, 2010 at 2:52 AM
There are a few mistakes but to me they look like some mishaps. They are not so big mistakes, I think you did just about %98
March 4, 2010 at 10:44 AM
Ya, I know. :p I had to cut some of the lines to make it all flow together correctly.
March 3, 2010 at 3:00 PM
This is good. There’s a few grammatical mistakes here and there but overall it’s nice. One question though. Why did you bold words in each line?
March 3, 2010 at 5:10 PM
I think I see one, but I think th ‘no’ was supposed to be an ‘on’. Oops. AND to fully understand that last part Willow you have to read each of the bold terms in the chronological order. C: